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Some schools are very strict about their school uniforms and the appearance of their pupil, while other schools have a very relaxed dress code. What are the advantages and disadvantages of children of having a school uniform?

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It is often argued that educational institutions should
be made
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 it compulsory for their
students
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 to wear special dress codes during school time.
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, some others do not imply any rules and regulations on pupils to what to wear.
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 essay will discuss the merits and drawbacks of uniforms. On the one side, the first and foremost reason for having a dress code is to build the spirit and
gives
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 a sense of pride. using special uniforms
students
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 proud to be a part of the institute and spread unity among others.
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, a uniform is an indicator of what institute you belong to and
parents
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 do not have to look at different
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 each day.
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. regular costume breaks the class barriers. All offspring considered equal no matter what is their parent's financial condition.
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, in a survey conducted by a National School, 70% of
students
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 &
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parents
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and parents
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 want to have a dress code for children so they don'
t
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 have to buy other
clothes
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.
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, some believe that wearing the same attire every day makes their child bored as they can'
t
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 express themselves by wearing their special
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.
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, children can be bullied by other school
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.
for
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this
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 reason, poor
parents
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 have difficulties admitting their kids to bigger institutes because they can'
t
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 afford all of these mandatory expenses regulated by those schools. on the other side, financially strong family children want to express their status by wearing expensive
clothes
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, which they won'
t
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 be able to because of the institution's strict rules.
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, there are fewer drawbacks to having a strict attire code in schools,
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, the merits outweigh the demerits as
parents
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 don'
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 have to worry about their costume rather than education.
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Content
Develop your ideas more clearly and provide more specific examples to support your points.
Structure
Organize your ideas in a more structured and logical way, and ensure that your introduction and conclusion are clear and effective.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Socioeconomic disparities
  • Instil
  • Belonging
  • Discipline
  • Professional environments
  • Decision-making process
  • Enhancing security measures
  • Suppress individuality
  • Freedom of expression
  • Financially burdensome
  • Comfort and personal preferences
  • Cultural or religious needs
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