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Some countries spend a lot of money preparing competitors to take part in major competitions such as Olympic Games or football World Cup. Some people say that it would be better to spend this money encouraging children to take up sports from a young age. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There are very different attitudes to the government arranging much budget for training
competitors
 who are preparing for those world
sports
 games
such
 as Olympic Games or the football World Cup.
Although
 many people believe that money should be spent on promoting offspring doing
sports
, I would prefer to support those who intend to participate in major competitions should be focused on. What's more, the kids can
also
 benefit from that. On one hand, the behaviour that spending a lot of money preparing
competitors
 to take part in major events definitely would attract attention from all around the region.
As a result
 of it, the importance of taking up
sports
 could be highlighted.
For example
, parents will more willing to spend time and energy enhancing the physical ability of their kids,
for instance
, they will more likely to send the children to learn running or swimming
instead
 of math or literacy.
On the other hand
, the process of preparing
competitors
 could officially illustrate the important points of joining some kinds of
sports
 and shows the vital things of participating in
sports
 events, which could help children get free from some unnecessary harm, or recover more quickly from some diseases that they may gain during the prosses of doing
sports
.
To sum up
, I, personally, do agree that the resources should be paid to those
competitors
 who take part in major competitions because not only those
sports
 but
also
 the children who live in the same country can obtain benefit from that.
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