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Some people think that the best way to improve road transport safety is to let the driver test each year. What extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, few of them
suggested
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 that the number of
traffic
 accidents around the world has increased exponentially just because of reckless driving. So, to bring new rules and regulations for the driving
test
and
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apply
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it should be renewed
by
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apply
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each year. Yet, there remains a contentious debate as to whether can
this
 phenomenon be a beneficial step or a destructive scenario. I agree with
this
 topic and will propound my accordance
along with
 credible examples. On the
hand
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, by supporting
this
 statement every year the driving
test
 is a must in a nation to avoid unnecessary death and harm to people.
In other
words
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 government of a country is constantly trying to improve a lot of prevention and new laws.
Thus
 each citizen of their country should know the latest changes in
traffic
 and annually the drivers to be tested.
For instance
, an empirical study by the
university
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 of Oxford shows that 90%of drivers can drive correctly if they pass the annual driving
test
.
On the other hand
, the rationale for why drivers should take the
test
 every year because to know the up-to-date rules.
This
 leads to keeping the people live in a standard way
due to
 that can reduce the
traffic
 on the road.
For example
, the study shows that peak hours in the morning and
as well as
 in the evening to reach the destination
it's
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is
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 delaying. As a way of conclusion, following
traffic
 rules can definitely decrease
the
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apply
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accident
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accidents
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 and can move to their respective places as soon as possible.
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coherence cohesion
The introduction lacks clarity and coherence. It is important to clearly state your opinion and introduce the main points you will discuss in the essay.
task achievement
The essay adequately addresses the task, but the ideas are not consistently supported with relevant and specific examples. Make sure to provide detailed examples to strengthen your argument.
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