While many people go to university for academic study, more people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualified workers such as electricians and plumbers. Do you agree or disagree?

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These days vocational training is a second choice for people who don'
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office jobs. So some workers think that electricians and plumbers are not good enough
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to learn,
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others believe that it is
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best choice.
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welcome everyone to study in universities.
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who can'
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complete their education are desperate to find something to make their leaving. So
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they will get the best
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to do something
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of studying.
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the lack of qualified workers needs more attention and
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so everyone
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it an option.
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kind of business doesn'
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bring a lot of money. To illustrate, most of the society prefers doing water and electricity problems by themselves they don'
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need someone to do it for them.
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workers are not getting paid enough for a long time
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fixing
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faucet takes time and effort but it's still cheap.
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the belief That
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jobs
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less income than the others.
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sometimes the tools are expensive and you have to buy the best quality. For an instance. If you get the lowest price peace that won do the job correctly so people won'
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like your work.
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proves clearly that qualified
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is not the best option. In conclusion, after a careful analysis of both points of view, I believe that everyone has a choice to do what they are comfortable with but of
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I agree that we must encourage people to do vocational training.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • skilled workers
  • vocational training
  • academic study
  • qualified
  • electricians
  • plumbers
  • technicians
  • hands-on experience
  • job market
  • infrastructure
  • economy
  • unemployment rates
  • consumer spending
  • educational paths
  • job satisfaction
  • societal resilience
  • versatile workforce
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