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Some people think that detailed criminal descriptions in newspapers and TV have bad influences, so this kind of information should be restricted in the media. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words

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Most people say that giving detailed descriptions of criminals in newspapers and TV is a source of bad influence on humanity and
also
 should be restricted in the media. I undoubtedly disagree with them since there are many cases today that we need to focus on. Let me explain my perspectives and beliefs. Giving accurate detailed information about a criminal in newspapers and TV is not a sin, since the person who does bad things to others is the one who needs to face the consequences for their actions. Being more aware of what is happening in our world or country is the best way to protect ourselves.
For instance
, maybe we can encounter some of them and we are capable to fight for our lives until the end.
In addition
, it
also
 helps other families become more aware of our surroundings.
On the other hand
, certain young age is influenced by our media and a few of them are imitating criminals because the content of newspapers or tv is detailed. Aside from the back of their mind (criminal) they are aware of facing criminal charges.
As a result
, they become more alert and cautious when going outside. Few of them are still doing the same thing are they known as the previous one?
Above all
, allowing to broadcast of criminal details is more beneficial to our country, and offers a safety protocol to other human beings, especially young age people.
This
 is one of the advantages to lessen criminal cases, a peaceful environment, and become more safely to our own country leads to more tourists coming and visiting our beautiful places here
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