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Some people think that secondary school children should study international news as one of the school subjects. Other people think that it is a waste of valuable school time. What do you think? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The potential for the global
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 to shape the views of today’s youth is considerable.
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,
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 some commentators think that the
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 has no place in secondary
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, other analysts defend the idea that international
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 should be studied at
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. In
this
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 essay, I shall examine a number of studies which show that both viewpoints are, to some degree, justified.
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 with, global
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 undoubtedly enriches teenagers’ understanding of contemporary affairs.
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 is because television reports provide concise summaries of international affairs.
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, a study run by Oxford sociologists showed that the
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 heavily influenced teenagers’ knowledge of contemporary affairs. Since any secondary
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education
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 would be incomplete without an awareness of
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 events, it is
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 clear that the
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 can play a vital role in assisting
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.
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, many critics argue that teenagers are negatively affected by the global
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’s focus on wars and civil unrest.
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 is because exposure to violence often leads to depression.
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, recent surveys have discovered that depressed teenagers usually cite the dismal state of the world as a source of their depression. Since mental health is an important objective of secondary
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, it is
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 questionable whether the study of international
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 wouldn’t be a destructive and wasteful use of
school
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 resources. In conclusion, it should be clear that there are reasons for and against the study of
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 at
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.
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 if
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 studies are to enter schools in the future, schools will have to think about how negative aspects of the
news
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 can be decreased, and positive aspects maximized.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global perspectives
  • cultural understanding
  • interconnected world
  • critical thinking skills
  • discern biases
  • global citizenship
  • curriculum
  • academic development
  • sensitive content
  • news cycles
  • structured curriculum
  • positive developments
  • fostering hope
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