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Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development?

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It is observed that with the development of the Internet, online learning is becoming more and more common. Many universities in the world provide online
courses
 for
students
 can easily access and study.
While
this
 trend has some drawbacks, it is a positive development
overall
. The main disadvantage of online university
courses
 is the quality. There are concerns about the quality of online
courses
, particularly with regard to the standard of teaching and pupils' output quality. As we can see in the COVID-19 pandemic, everybody was forced to learn at home through zoom calls. During
this
 time, many
students
 did not focus on their lessons,
instead
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 they slept or played video games.
Moreover
, many
students
 cheated on exams as online tests were much easier for fraud. These hinder teachers from assessing their pupils.
Due to
 that, many
students
 still have a qualification after finishing the course
although
 they did not learn anything. Despite the negatives mentioned above, I believe that online university
courses
 are a positive development for various reasons.
Firstly
, online
courses
 make education more accessible for people who can not attend
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lecture on campus because of financial, geographical, or personal reasons.
For example
, my aunt who is 45 years old, recently took an undergraduate course on business in a different country. She can still take care of her children and have
a
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 MBA degree.
Secondly
, online
courses
 can provide the flexibility for
students
 to study on their own schedule. Pupils can choose the time that suits them to balance their academics and work.
Finally
, online
courses
 are more cost-effective than traditional,
since
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it
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 do not require as many facilities,
staffs
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 and
equipments
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equipment
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 as studying directly on campus. In conclusion,
although
 there are some problems
in
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 Internet-based learning, I believed that there are far more benefits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Distance learning
  • Flexible schedule
  • Virtual classroom
  • Digital resources
  • E-learning platforms
  • Asynchronous learning
  • Synchronous learning
  • Cost-effective
  • Self-paced study
  • Technical difficulties
  • Blended learning
  • Online modules
  • Remote access
  • Student engagement
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