Psychological illnesses may not be as obvious as physical disabilities or illnesses, nevertheless they are just as disabling in their own way. Society, however, is more accepting of those with physical than psychological illnesses or disabilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often argued that people nowadays are not considering mental
illness
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disabling as compared to
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physical
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. I tend to agree with
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view. I am of the opinion that psychological impairments should be considered as important as physical illnesses. Ideas articulated
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discourse will support my stand and at the same time highlight the contradictory views that
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society
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might possibly have. The primary reason for my belief is
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mental
illness
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abstract in nature. It is undeniably true that mental
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disorder
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cannot be shown it could only be felt.
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, physical impairment can be seen and shows severity.
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, in 2019, as per
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association in India, it was noticed that a large Indian population did not consider depression as a
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if compared with flu or accident. Another reason to uphold my view is the influence of cinema and advertisements. It is an irrefutable fact that movies and adverts have
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influence on peoples’
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. In
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actors are always shown suffering from dreadful diseases and
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for the impairments that look severe.
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, individuals feel diseases which are
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in nature are disabling and mental illnesses are not disabling.
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, there are individuals in
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society
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who are of the outlook that people in
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society
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do consider mental
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disorder
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disorders
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disabling as compared to physical disorders. One of the possible reasons for
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belief is
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in mental hospitals and rehab
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. Undoubtedly,
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for material possession is increasing day by day.
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has increased wrath and anger among individuals.
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, to mitigate
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government has started initiatives as mentioned above. Another reason for
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inclination is
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in travel and touring. What I mean by
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is that at least each member of the family is going through some stress, which could be because of peer pressure,
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to climb the corporate ladder among others. Families have started noticing
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negative behaviour.
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, they have started spending time with their loved ones by going on frequent vacations.
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, there surely are those in
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society
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who are convinced with the fact that psychological
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is as harmful as physical impairment and they have all the right reasons to back their conviction. I,
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, am of the firm opinion that
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does not take mental
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as grave as physical
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because it cannot be seen and touched and
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people around us like to follow what is shown to them via movies and commercials.
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