Parent, usually mothers, give up work, choose to stay home and look after families. Some people think the government should give them salary, others disagree. Discuss both and give your opinion?

Since the beginning of time,
mothers
were seen as a person to nurture and look
afte
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after
a child when they are born. Recently, with the changing culture and the views
from
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the public,
mothers
started to pursue their careers and wanted equal opportunities to other parents from the government
instead
of staying at home and
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after their families. In
this
essay, I will review both views and provide concluding remarks. To start with, in some instances
mothers
of
new born
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children
are forced to give up their work and stay home
due to
financial reasons. It has become very expensive to raise
children
due to
childcare costs and other challenges
such
as time and travel.
As a result
of that, a lot more support is expected from the government that should provide either free childcare or incentives for businesses to provide salaries for longer than 9 months after
child's
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birth.
On the other hand
, with the recent challenges across the globe
such
as Covid 19 pandemic,
the
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governments had to shift their focus to investing millions of pounds into healthcare systems to protect and provide
to
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citizens
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of their countries.
Thus
, there has been a change
of
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spending which resulted in
reduction
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of
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money spent
for
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young families. It is argued, that for the governments it is not profitable and efficient to give
salary
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to raise
children
as the businesses lack
of
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taxes being paid.
To sum up
, governments all across the world faced
signifcant
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significant
challenges over the
last
few years and it has adversely affected public spending focusing on parents with
new born
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children
. I strongly suggest that despite all those reasons, there should be more emphasis and support provided to
mothers
and fathers in order for
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growth of
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citizens.
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