A large companyin your area has decided to spend amount of money,either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years or to pay for two open-air concerts.It has asked for feed back general public. write a letter to the company .in your letter -describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team -summerise the benefits of paying for the concert. -say how you think to send the the money

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to give my feedback in regard to the amount which your company decided to sponsor in the Cambridge park area.I am a resident of

this

area for 10 years. First of all thanks to the company for deciding to grant some funds to the community.It is a good idea to support the local children's sports team.The young players play a variety of games like cricket, football, volleyball and other athletics.

Last

time the cricket team won the state running medal.They could perform better but they do not have a proper coach to train them.

In addition

to that the team needs some sports materials to support the games and the poor family children's sports uniform.They can encourage them to keep fit and skilled .

Secondly

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I came to know from other sources that the company want to sponsor local concerts.

This

helps to encourage the elders to perform their skills and to enjoy for some time as they are over stress at work.

However

,my small suggestion to you is that

although

the grant can bring a good time for the residents for the special occasion, it would be more beneficial and milestone , a lot of encouragement to build the children's talents and provide facilities to keep them fit. Looking forwards to seeing it in action. yours faithfully. Ranjit K

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Lexical resource: 8.0

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Task Achievement: 7.0

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