Some people think children have the freedom to make mistakes, while other people believe that adults should prevent children from making mistakes. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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People have divergent views about whether we should keep

children

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away from making

mistakes

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or not. Personally, I think that it is acceptable to make

mistakes

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for

children

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while

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also

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believe that adults have to educate

children

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sledom

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seldom

do wrong things. In

this

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essay, I will

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explain

why we might make

balance

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a balance

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both sides. On the one hand, I

convinced

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that

children

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could learn much from a

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lesson

so that making

mistakes

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should not be avoided. There are various reasons why

teenagers

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could learn much from

mistakes

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. First of all,

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finding out the reasons why they are wrong might let them

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not make

same

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the same

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mistakes

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they would try other measures to

slove

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solve

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problem, which develops their

problem-sloving

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problem-solving

abilities.

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, when they make

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, they

absloutely

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absolutely

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deeply

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impressions about it. For

eample

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example

, a teacher

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a student a

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question

in a class, but the student

answer

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wrong.

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, the student would understand that there

are

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somthing

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something

they are unfamiliar with and

they

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that they

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should learn more.

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although

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teenagers

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could be educated by their

mistakes

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, it

seem

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to me that humans might control the degree

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them

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they

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make

mistakes

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. To put it shortly, it is not

everythig

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everything

which

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in which

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child

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a child

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could make

mistakes

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. Take illegal activities

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, as long as they commit a crime,

this

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relatively

have

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a huge impact

for

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them.

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teenagers

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might

were

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taught that some

mistakes

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are unacceptable

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stealing, fighting, and

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robbery

. In conclusion, indeed there are some negative effects when it comes to

children

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wrong things, but I certainly believe that

mistakes

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a great teacher for

teenagers

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to learn and

growth

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as long as

adult

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an adult

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would teach their

children

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to be aware of their

mistakes

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

293 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

freedom to make mistakes
critical thinking skills
lifelong learning
guided learning environment
resilience
independence
overprotective
dependency
problem-solving skills
confidence
negative consequences
learning process
personal growth
trial and error
balance safety and learning
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empowerment
risk-taking
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Some people think children have the freedom to make mistakes, while other people believe that adults should prevent children from making mistakes. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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