It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (eg.dinosaurs,dodos..) There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening. Do you agree or Disagree?

In the process of nature for
animals
species to become extinct .
For example
,dinosaurs and dodos. There is no reason why humans should prevent and try
this
from happening.
further
,we explain in the essay if we agree or disagree.
Firstly
,longtime time ago there were
animals
extinct
such
as
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dinosaurs and dodos.
According to
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story
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there are ten
books
were written by
Joan
Adams . He was a scientist .He
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everything in his
books
why ? These
animals
disappear back
then
.
This
is due lack of food and many more issues back
then
.These
animals
are very rare
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our planet.
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,scientists mentioned the disasters happening back
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planet already explains how scientists
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lost during
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research about these rare
animals
. Mainly , because of
this
issue people hate to meet these
animals
and they don't want to take any effort to prevent
this
from happening .
Thirdly
,there are two sides that the
story
of who agree
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prevent
this
from happening
also
,
on the other hand
,There are
anotherw
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other
party who hates to prevent
this
from happening. In order,
firstly
, children like to see dinosaurs and dodos
due to
films and cartoons. There was a film director called Marco.He made films and cartoons based on
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Adams
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story
books
.so most
of
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the
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children are curious to see these rare
animals
.
Secondly
, when these situations
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from the
parents
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side they are not curious to see these rare
animals
due to
the disaster that these
animals
had done in the past.
Joan
Adams
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story
books
mentioned clearly about
this
situation.
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, in my opinion, it's better to stick with
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decision .Since
Joan
Adam
scientist
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mentioned what
has
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happened
millennials
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ago .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inevitability
  • ecological balance
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem services
  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • overhunting
  • interdependent
  • cascading effect
  • evolutionary biology
  • stewardship
  • mitigate
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