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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summurise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summurise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant
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The chart provides data about the week-expenditure which was spent by families in a particular country from 1968 to 2018. Units are measured in percentage.
Overall
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, it clearly
be
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is
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 seen that units
such
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 as
the
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apply
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housing,
the
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apply
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transport and
the
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leisure were more consumed by households,
whereas
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 others
such
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 as clothing and footwear, personal
goods
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 and household
goods
Use synonyms
 were less spent on in the given periods. Regarding most common expense by local people in a week in that area was
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the
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food which showed 35 per cent in 1986 and
then
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 in 2018 around 20% to compare the less point was seen on fuel and power with
the
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a
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 percentage of above 5 per cent in both represented eras. Families spent more on
the
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apply
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housing,
the
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apply
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transport and
the
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apply
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leisure about 10% in 1986 and more than 15% in 2018,
however
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, they convened for
the
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apply
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clothing and footwear,
the
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apply
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personal
goods
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 and
the
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apply
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household
goods
Use synonyms
 approximately 8%
for
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per
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the
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week
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weeks
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 in both 1968 and
in
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apply
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2018 years.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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