The diagram shows how the rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in Australia.

The diagram shows how the rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in Australia.
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The flowchart depicts all the necessary steps for drinking
water
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in Australia. Those processes will be divided into two main steps: producing filtering
water
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and drinking
water
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. The whole production
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started
with
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collecting rainwater from every Australian household in the drain.
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, before
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being filtered
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filtered
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filtering
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,
water
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needs to be delivered by
drain
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which is located in the ceiling and soil. Filtration is one of the crucial actions to filter any contamination. After
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,
water
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gets to be stored in the storage machine to be processed
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. In the subsequent stage,
water
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should be transported by pipes and treated by
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water
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treatment machine to destroy any chemical molecules in order to security and safety in society. Afterwards,
water
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is delivered to every household through specific pipes. Eventually,
water
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is ready to be consumed by every Australian.
This
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technology helps people to improve their drinking habits and prevent any diseases
such
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as diarrhoea and thymus.
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