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In many societies, there is less social contact between the elderly and the young. What are the reasons and what measures can be taken?

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Nowadays, there is less interaction between old
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 and young
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 I will discuss the reasons for less social contact between different generations and some solutions. On the one hand, there is no doubt that the elderly and young have a big generation gap regarding the difference in lifestyle trends. Older
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 who live in traditional culture would not like to adapt to modern society. It causes a lot of
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 problems between them.
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, international food and street food are now a key part of teenage life. Sushi and bubble milk tea
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 the most attractive for junior citizens rather than eating at home with their grandparents.
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, the generation gap is a huge barrier between junior and senior citizens.
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, youngers rely on digital products. They spend plenty of time on social media to post their daily life and
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 about their friend’s life. It reduces the opportunity
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 face-to-face with their relatives and grandparents.
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, teens spend lots of time on social platforms
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 as Facebook and Instagram. Youngers like to take a photo before they have a meal and
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 publish the picture on
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social media
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, they prefer checking the updated information
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 they are eating food.
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, it develops a distance between the generations. In conclusion, the elderly and young have a lack of
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. It is because of the generation gap and the use of technology. It can be solved through active
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 as family events or gatherings and by encouraging older
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 to learn to use technology.
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, it helps to build up a
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 bond between them.
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