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Today, many people do not know their neighbours. Why is this? What can be done about this?

#people #neighbours
In these
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 days, many individuals do not acquaint each other
although
 both of them live in the same vicinity.
This
case
 has become common because
people
 do not have
time
 to contact each other in comparison to the past and they have become more
introvert
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 and selfish. To ratify
this
case
, some meeting
events
 and excursions can be held. The cause of
this
 situation correlated with expanding work shifts. Most
people
 cannot find
opportunity
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an opportunity
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 to meet and visit their
neighbours
 because they come back
their
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home at late times and they need to rest. At the weekends, they opt to share their moments with their relatives and close friends.
Thus
, even though they intend to meet their
neighbours
, they cannot
due to
 their priorities. The second reason
of
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this
case
 is their altered behaviours which have been valid in recent years.
By
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the
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technological developments, many individuals,
particularly
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a particularly
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new
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 generation have become more
introvert
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 than
the
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in the
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 past
time
. They do not need to have
a
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contact with their
neighbours
.
In addition
, some of them are more selfish and they do not want
share
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to share
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 their
time
 interests. These manners may be derived from their less
trustfulness
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 behaviour
due to
 some issues in their past.
Therefore
, they do not meet and spend
time
 with their
neighbours
. To reverse these situations
to
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positive
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, elder residents
at
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in
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 the neighbourhood can arrange some meetings,
events
 or parties in order to gather
people
.
This
 can provide
positive
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a positive
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 impact
to
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 distrustful
neighbours
 and they feel gratified to others.
Besides
, some excursions can be held at the weekends. Old residents have a crucial role in meeting newcomers. These kinds of
events
 present
good
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a good
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opportunity
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opportunities
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 to meet and create close relationships
each
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with each
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 other. In conclusion, causes and examples can be multiplied in
this
case
.
Although
 many
people
 have some justified reasons
that
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they cannot attend to meet, some
events
 would be beneficial to break their persistence. 46 dk.
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  • neighbourhood bonds
  • social media connectivity
  • urban lifestyle
  • online relationships
  • fast-paced society
  • privacy concerns
  • communal relations
  • individualism
  • transient societies
  • expatriates
  • cultural shift
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