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Traffic congestion is becoming increasingly problematic in major cities. What solutions can you suggest to help solve this problem?

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With the growth
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of, population
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population there has
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 been an increase in
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 purchasing endless numbers of vehicles leading to congested roads and hours wasted in
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 each day by
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 essay will discuss possible solutions to avoid
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 problem. First of all the government should invest more capital in public transport. The majority of the
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 complain about the poor condition of the buses and trains
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 provoking them to purchase personal vehicles. Transportation should be made more accessible and safe so that
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 working early or late can access it with no fear in their minds.
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 invest in more buses so that there are frequent buses on most busy routes.
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 will ultimately reduce cars on the road
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 it will reduce
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. Another solution to minimize
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 issue is to increase gas prices
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 so that it encourages
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 to use public transport or opt for a carpool as an option for daily commuting. Apart from that, a high rate of green taxes should be enforced on the cars so that it discourages them from purchasing a car. To summarize, an increase in a
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 jam
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 jams is a major problem in many big cities
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 not only makes us waste hours in
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 increased air and noise pollution. Government should come up with strict laws to reduce cars on the roads.
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