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Governments should speand money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Transportation plays a major role in the life of human beings,development of the country is considered if there are better transportation networks .Many
people
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 assert that higher authorities should utilise more
money
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 to improve the railway system,
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 the rest of the
people
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 prefer to make development in the roads.
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 my perspective, both are equally important ,so an equal amount of
money
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 should be utilized. First of all, railways are a convenient way to travel because it helps
people
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 to save valuable time , large miles of distance can be covered just in a few hours,
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 buses take several hours to travel.
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, a maximum number of
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contribution to saving the environment;
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, a large number of
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 can not travel by using cars and buses ,they will use their personal ways of transportation ;
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, more resources will be needed;
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 there will be more traffic on roads. on the flip side, public buses cover every nook and corner of society
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 the railway stays in a particular location sometimes it could be hard for
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 if they suddenly change their destination or they have to change during any emergency.
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, railways materials are too much expensive,
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 spending
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 on roads they can save some amount which could be used for making development in other fields
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 as medical professionals. In conclusion, no doubt,
people
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 prefer to utilize more
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 on the railway networks
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 having more advantages,
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 their drawbacks should not be neglected ;
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,
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 my opinion, an equal proportion of
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 should be utilized on both .
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