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Today friendly robots are developed to help people at work and home. Do you think the positive development outweigh the negative?

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Nowadays, friendly robots are being fabricated to aid people at workplaces and at their residences. In my point of view, I believe that the benefits of using the
robot
 are higher than its drawbacks.
This
 essay will briefly explain the reasons for that.
To begin
 with, technology has changed the way of doing things. In today's century, most activities need to be done faster and easier and with , the
robot
 that goal can be achieved.
Moreover
,
machine
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 helps people to do the majority of their duty both at home and the workplace faster and with less stress. For example, the University of Mines and Technology in Ghana indicates that for a job that robots can use one day to accomplish, human beings will use one week to finish the same work .
On the other hand
, some think that the
robot
 will cause unemployment to the individual since the
robot
 can perform most of the work without being exhausted.
Moreover
, whenever the
robot
 gets a fault it will produce error items.
For instance
, about 36% of Ghanaian men were using their manpower to pound fufu for a living but now
due to
 the invention of the fufu machine, all those people have lost their job and has become unemployed. In conclusion, with the help of robots , most tasks are completed faster and easier at work and home with no stress.
However
,
the
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robot
also
 creates unemployment in
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society. On
this
 note, I believe that
robot
 is more productive than it detrimental effect .
Then
 the positive effects outweigh the negative.
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