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The chart below shows the number of girls per 100 boys enrolled in different levels of school education.

The chart below shows the number of girls per 100 boys enrolled in different levels of school education.
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The graph below shows the comparison between the
number
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 of
girls
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 and
boys
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 enrolled on primary
education
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 to tertiary
education
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 in developing
countries
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 and developed
countries
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 in the two years 1990 and 1998. As transparent from the chart, it can be seen that the
number
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 of
girls
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 attending primary and secondary schools was always less than the
number
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 of
boys
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. But at the highest level of school
education
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, there was a big difference when
girls
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 in developed
countries
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 continued their studying path better than
girls
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 in developing
countries
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. In both developing and developed
countries
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, we can see that boy is the gender which went to school much more than
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girl.
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 figure was 83 and 87 pupils participating in primary
education
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 in developing
countries
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 in 1990 and 1998, respectively. But at the higher level,
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 figure declined to only 72 and 82
girls
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 per 100
boys
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. Whilst, in developed
countries
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, the
number
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 of
girls
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 per 100
boys
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 attending class in both primary and secondary
education
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 fluctuated slightly from 95 to 98 pupils. To the highest level of
education
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, the progression of developed
countries
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 had made the
number
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 of
girls
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 exceed the target of 100 at 105 in 1990 and 112 in 1998. Whilst.
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 figure in developing
countries
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 was much less than in others with 66 and 75 female students per 100 male students in 1990 and 1998, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, girls, boys, education, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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