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Some people think that fast food is saving time while others believe that it is wasting of money Discuss advantages and disadvantages of fast food.

#people #food #time #money
In recent years,
the
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most of
the
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society
have
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 been eating fast foods. Some people are eating
junk
food
 because of saving
their
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time.In my
opinion
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 it causes some bad consequences.
To begin
 with, there are a few benefits of consuming
junk
food
than
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homemade
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a homemade
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meal
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meals
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. First of all,the main advantage of convenience
food
 can be useful for your time.
For instance
, a person who is always on the move
be
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 late and can not cook.
In addition
, they do not want to lose track of time.
As a result
, they should buy fast
foods
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food
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 or half-made dishes.
Furthermore
, there
are
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whale
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a whale
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 of demands for proceeded
food
. It can be helpful to rise cafeterias. As you know, finding a well-paid job can be easy because of fast
food
.
On the other hand
 , there are some drawbacks that
consumption
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 of fast
food
.
Firstly
,if
person
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a person
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 changes eating
junk
food
 into
habit
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a habit
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 , it can make
this
 person lazy .
Therefore
, it can be
main
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the main
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 weapon for
disease
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diseases
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such
 as high blood pressure and diabetes.It makes you put on weight.
Secondly
, if fast
food
 turns into
usual
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the usual
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 thing, it can be
problem
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a problem
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 for
financial
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the financial
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 side.
Consequently
, it causes appalling things like getting into debt.
Thirdly
 consuming
this
 kind of meal can affect people.
For example
, if people consume it every day, they will
stuck
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 at home.
Thus
 it can increase
to
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being mentally and physically weak.
To sum up
 , eating fast
food
 always can have bad impacts. I strongly believe that consuming healthy
food
such
 as salad is more useful for our health than
junk
food
.
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