Some people say that music is a good way of brining people of different cultes and ages together. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinioin?

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The phenomenon of
music
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is an amazing thing that would connect
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beyond the border of nation, languages and age has aroused wide concern among various circles.Divergent as
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's views on
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issue in question may be, I totally agree that we can understand each other through
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. Of all the reasons why
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can make
people
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together without cultural and age
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, probably the most significant one is that
music
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is a communal language as it
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by
a
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plenty of
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symbols
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. To illustrate, we can use different patterns of symbols to express different emotions.
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, the sound of
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a brithday
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brithday
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birthday
song can make
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feel happy. There are various combinations of musical symbols
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spread different kinds of feeling
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as
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,
exciting
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, love, joy, etc...
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,
people
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can share their feeling through
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and in turn make everyone
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together. Another reason that should not be overlooked is that
music
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can make different
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share the same thought.
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, the
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who go to
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theatre
and participate
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same musical show. They all experienced
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the same
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moment and come up with similar comments after the
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theatre
, which is no matter they
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from and
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their age
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.
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,
music
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has the power to make
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together. Under
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line of thinking, it seems to me that
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can share their feeling and emotion about the same thing in order to make everybody
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stay on the same page.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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