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Some people say that industrial growth is necessary to solve poverty, but some other people argue that industrial growth is creating environmental problems and it should be stopped. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is undeniable that today's
society
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 has revolutionised the
growth
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 of
industry
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the industry
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 worldwide.
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 some propound that the development of industrial areas has been generating environmental issues and
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should be halted, others believe that it has brought about wealth. In my opinion, I think that industrial
growth
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 should be regulated by governments.
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 essay will discuss both views before elaborating on my viewpoint. On the one hand, the enhancement of
society
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 stems from industrial revolutions. First and foremost, members of
society
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 can benefit from
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 development because there is enormous availability of employment opportunities.
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, in Thailand, Thais have been making meet ends for years since many Japanese factories have been erected, which contribute to better standards of living.
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, people who are in
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the poverty
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 line may be able to get
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jobs from
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growth
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.
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, the industrial sectors are undoubtedly crucial for humans.
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,
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industrial
growth
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 may be the leading
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 of environmental matters. To put it simply, it is responsible for various
polution
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pollution
,
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 as water, air, and noise pollution, which is detrimental to nature and human health. The more they carelessly operate their factories, the worse
pollution
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the pollution
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 problem is.
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, in China, coal is being used as a main source of energy nowadays,
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accelerates
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 the alarming situation of climate change.
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,
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industrial
growth
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 has its own side effects on
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the earth
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 as well. In conclusion, even though some claim that
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industrial development can resolve the poverty problem, others argue that it has countless environmental issues. I am of opinion that the manufacturing sectors are vital to
society
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 in terms of achieving prosperity;
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, the environmental issues from
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 industries should be taken
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 consideration, and
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they
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 should be solved by the government.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial growth
  • poverty
  • income opportunities
  • technological advancements
  • productivity
  • income inequality
  • wealthy individuals
  • corporations
  • environmental impacts
  • impoverished communities
  • sustainable development
  • inclusive development
  • alleviation
  • measures
  • accompany
  • concerns
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