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The pie charts show information about energy production in a country in teo separate years.

The pie charts show information about energy production in a country in teo separate years.
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The given pie charts compare data about
consumption
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the consumption
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 of energy
productions
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production
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 in a country in 1995 and 2005. The units were measured by percentages.
It is clear that
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,
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 higher power production intake included gas, coal, and petrol, but the dominant
was
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the
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apply
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figure
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 for coal for both given years.
Overall
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, the
figure
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 for nuclear and other consumed energy less than other tools. For more details, in 1995 the
figure
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 for coal was 29. 80%, for gas it was 29. 63%, and for
petro
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,petro
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 it was 29. 27% from 100%.
However
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, by the year
of
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2005
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,2005
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 all
production's
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production
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rate
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rates
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 changed. The rate of petro power production decreased to 19. 55%. The percental for gas witnessed a margin rose to 30. 31%. The
figure
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 for coal increased
more
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by more
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 than 1%, and
this
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figure
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 saved
dominant
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the dominant
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 position in the group. In stark contrast, the rate for nuclear and other was very little. In 1995 it was 6. 40% for
forward
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the forward
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 one, and 4. 90% for the
figure
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 for
other
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the other
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.
Although
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,
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 In 2005 both figures experienced a little increase, their percentage was less than 11% in the group.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words figure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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