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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
Everyday
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 technology upgrades to
new
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the new
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version
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versions
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 with the development.
Therefore
, printed materials
such
 as books,
newspapers
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and newspapers
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 become out of use
due to
 the advance
of
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 technology. I mostly agree with
this
 statement since
internet
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the internet
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 becomes the best version of collecting knowledge without paying. The main reason why I agree is because of the huge
data base
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database
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 that we can refer
by
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to by
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 sitting in one place.
Also
, it is
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a fee
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fee
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free
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 of charge and no need to spend more time
on
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searching
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 pages.
Moreover
,
people
 can refer to all the information
once
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 even having lots of books on the table. All students can get the details of their subject by using one electronic device. As an example, all students are carrying heavy bags on their shoulders and
this
 technology might be
benefits
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 for students to bring one electronic device rather than holding all books which
limited
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 to small subject areas.
On the other hand
, not only the knowledge but
also
people
 can update with the recent news at the time which was happening. In the past, most
people
 used to get information through newspapers, and it took so much time.
In addition
, in the present era, the news spread all over the world within
few
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 minutes.
For instance
,
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an earthquake
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earthquake
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earthquakes
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of
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in
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 Iraq and Turkey became the most sensitive scenario
in
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all over the world after telecasting videos on the internet.
Therefore
, the most important thing is
people
 can get visualize
report
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reports
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 rather than reading printed materials.
However
, the only drawback is the system which difficult to learn quickly for elder
people
. But
development
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 of the internet makes
it
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apply
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to
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control very easy for all ages.
To sum up
, the online platform has
a
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massive knowledge which won’t be erased permanently
due to
this
 value and
contents
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content
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.
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  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
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  • internet
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