A country becomes more interesting and develops more quickly when its population includes a mixture of nationalities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

An amalgamation of people, from different countries across the globe, can make a democracy
become
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more interesting and
contributes
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contribute
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to developing a
nation
more rapidly. The
utmost
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important resource of a
nation
is its population and certainly, if it is varied
then
it can contribute towards cultural diversity and
sharing
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of thoughts, ideas and knowledge. But there are obvious issues that may arise as the origin of every person from different nations is varied and
hence
, it may lead to a feeling of seclusion. So,
this
idea needs proper scrutiny before jumping to a conclusion. There are an array of reasons that support the idea of collaborating with diversified nationalities for the growth of a
country
. First and the most obvious one is cultural diversity
due to
which the host
nation
as well as
the immigrants get to experience multiple cultures.
Secondly
, An individual from another
country
brings innovative ideas, particularly domain expertise.
For instance
, entrepreneurs like "Sundar Pichai" and "Satya Nadella" have created an indelible impact on the US economy.
This
definitely contributes to the
nation
's GDP and
thus
, improves the
overall
standard of living of the folks in that
country
. Maintaining a multi-lingual and diversified culture is challenging. The host
country
is bound to have laws surrounding equality and inclusion but still, a lot of people do not feel a sense of belonging.
Moreover
, a person from any
country
will have a perspective on someone from another
nation
which in turn, is the obvious explanation for why people look down on certain races.
This
leads to extreme measures
such
as riots as
this
society is kept devoid of their human rights.
To conclude
, I do agree to a certain extent that collaborating with different minds from across the world could be a good idea for a
nation
only if the
country
is able to maintain a sense of inclusion and equality amongst these individuals.
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