Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In the contemporary world, after graduating high
school
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it is possible for teenagers to be provided with a job or continue their
study
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straightforward
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. It is thought that getting a job has some benefits,
whereas
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others suggest that getting it after studying at any college or university could be better as they can learn some new information about their areas of training.
To
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the beginning, it is considered that adolescents after finishing
their
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school
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need to be occupied because from their teen
ages
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they have to be taught to face some problems and troubles in their daily
life
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lives
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. For example, on an ordinary
day
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day,
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someone from their family can pick up an illness but the
finance
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they have
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provide the treatment or from their
child
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ages
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they have been rising in poor and difficult times. As a
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most youngsters choose to
work
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straightly
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after graduation from
school
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.
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, others, including me, declare that if youth
will
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have an occupation in their
school
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years, their quality of
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might be poor of skills and experiences. So that they should learn everything in
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at colleges and universities. They cannot be professional
of
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their direct area of
work
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without the diploma of bachelor's degree. Even doctors, lawyers, judges and
architectures
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couldn't make any mistakes in their
work
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as it can lead to huge problems in future days.
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, graduates must get any qualifications from universities. In conclusion, in
this
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essay I emphasized
on
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how the knowledge from higher education institutions
are
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required in future lives and without
this
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capacity they are nothing in life.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Academic qualifications
  • Specialized skills
  • In-depth knowledge
  • Personal growth
  • Social development
  • Practical experience
  • Financial independence
  • Career progression
  • Professional networking
  • Education
  • Work experience
  • Successful career
  • Personal interests
  • Career goals
  • Decision-making process
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