The diagram shows how chocolate is produced.
The given graph illustrates the way of production of chocolate from cacao red pods.
Overall
, it is a linear process consisting of ten stages starting with harvesting from trees to processing in a factory.
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To begin
with, once ripe red pods have been harvested from cacao trees in South America, Africa or Indonesia, it is Linking Words
then
broken to receive white cacao Linking Words
beans
. Use synonyms
Following
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this
, the Linking Words
beans
are fermented in special boxes and spread under the sun to dry. After a Use synonyms
while
, they are collected in large sacks to deliver to a factory by train or lorry.
When dry Linking Words
beans
have been transported to the factory, they are Use synonyms
subsequently
fried in an oven at 350 degrees to remove all the water. In the final steps, roasted Linking Words
beans
are milled in a crushing machine to delete shells from them. Use synonyms
Finally
, cleared Linking Words
beans
are conveyed in a press, where they become liquid chocolate to make tiles.Use synonyms
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