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As the number of cars increases, more money has to be spent on road systems. Some people think the government should pay for this. Others, however, think that drivers should cover the costs. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#cars #increases #money #road #systems #people #government #drivers #costs
More funds should be invested
on
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vehicle based
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vehicle-based
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 transportation
systems
due to
 increasing car numbers. It is believed
some
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by some
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 individuals that these improvements ought to be assumed by
government
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the government
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while
 others assert that the costs should be undertaken by
drivers
. It is reasonable and fair that government should pay the
road
 investments because it gathers funds via taxes for improving infrastructure
systems
. Looking at
this
 case from the other side,
drivers
 may assume maintenance and improvement of the
roads
 because only they utilize these
services
. On the one hand, it is a common fact that
governments
 are responsible
in
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for
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 the
developing
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 and maintenance of
the
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road
systems
. To perform their responsibilities, they gather taxes via some products and
services
.
Subsequently
, these taxes are allocated
according to
 the needs of
public
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the public
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. The improvement of the
road
 links and additional
roads
 can be counted as examples.
Besides
,
governments
 have provided these
services
 since
municipal
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 phenomenon starts in
19th
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 century and their experience
sufficient
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.
Thus
,
governments
 can overcome these
services
 easily.
On the other hand
, the liability of the improvement of the
roads
 may be assumed by
drivers
 because usually they utilize these
roads
. They can establish foundations for
roads
 and they pay money annually
according to
 their mileage and vehicle type. Afterwards, they conduct
the
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investments
of
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in
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road
systems
 with
governments’
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governments
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 authorities. With these situations, their expectations from the
roads
 can be solved rapidly and easily. In short, paying the costs
by
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drivers
 can be beneficial for them. In conclusion,
causes
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 and examples
on
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this
 case can be multiplied.
Although
,
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drivers
’ direct payments for improving
roads
is
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are
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 looking beneficial, in my opinion, these improvements should be handled by
governments
due to
 their experience and better organizations for using funds. 50 dk.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • equitable access
  • public service
  • comprehensive planning
  • financial burden
  • user-pay principle
  • traffic congestion
  • encourage sustainable transportation
  • fair distribution of costs
  • direct benefit
  • road taxes
  • tolls
  • revenue
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