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Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion

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Nowadays, some part of the population finds joy in trying new activities or different
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, other
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 feel comfortable doing
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 they know from before.
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a different points
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 of view about doing the same
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 or completely differently.
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 think they will gain more experience because they are trying unusual
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. The main reason for that
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is visiting new places or trying new
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 increases your knowledge about different cultures or history.
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, if you are on holiday to new places like Italy and you are visiting Rome maybe you will discover new
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 about Coliseum you did not know before. In
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 you are learning. On the other side, some
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 like to have a sense of stability in their life and
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 can be related to only experiencing
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 they know they like.
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,
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 who rely on stability tend to not try new
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 because they like more familiar activities or
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, Oxford university analysts different kinds of personalities and shows
people
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 who tend to be more stable are less open to experiencing new activities or
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. For
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people
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's personality influences the way they want to experience life with new
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 or
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 they know from before. In conclusion, some
people
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 like to try
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 in their life.
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, other
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 like more familiar
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. In my opinion, I think I like more trying new
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 because of the experience and new knowledge.
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, we see why some
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 are not so open to experiencing new
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 mainly because of their personality which chooses to have more stability.
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