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Children are now watching more television than they have ever done before. - What are some of the negative effects of children watching a lot of television? Do you think young children should be allowed to watch television?

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Dear Sir, I am writing
the
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 letter to you to request
you
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for
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my absence from work for a month. I wanted to inform you that the wedding of my brother is fixed
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 the 25th
September
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 2023. All the functions and ceremonies will be celebrated in Goa as it is a destination wedding. I have to plan and coordinate
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all the arrangements and shopping. I am requesting
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leaves for a month starting from 1 September 2023 to 30 September 2023. I have planned all the work and allocated the tasks to the team. I am training Sneha to attend the client calls in my absence. I will be available during
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 period on phone calls.
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 you for approving the leaves. I will share the wedding invitation personally. Thanking you, Ishpreet
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