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Art and music are considered some of the fundamental elements of society. Do you think art and music still have a place in today’s modern world of technology?Should children spend more time learning art and music at school? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Since we living in
twenty-first
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 century there is no doubt that information
technology
 has played a major part in our day-to-day life.
Subjects
 like
music
 and
arts
 are fading away from our society.
on the other hand
, many peoples believe that these
subjects
 should remain and every child continue to learn from the early stage of life.I partially disagreed with the point as I believe in modern society Information
technology
 is the most important and children must spend more
time
 learning
the
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technology
 but at the same
time
Music
 and
Arts
 cannot be ignored.
Firstly
 when we discuss career opportunities there is very minimum demand for
music
 and art section and at the same ,
time
 everyone is not talented in those
subjects
.but information
technology
 not required talent and everyone can learn in the job market many vacancies are available with demands.
Therefore
 I strongly believe that children should not spend much
time
 on those
subjects
.
On the other hand
, I
also
 believe that
music
 and
arts
 will benefit
to
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a later stage of every children's life
especially
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 for creative thinking and
also
music
 and
arts
 can entertain people which really need for modern society. In conclusion, I feel schools should not remove the
arts
 and
music
 from their curriculum because every child has the right to follow their interests but we cannot
also
 deny the importance of IT in today's world, and to completely turn your back on it would be a foolish mistake with devastating consequences.
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