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plastic bags , plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the envirnment . what damage does plastic do to the environment ? what can be done by governments and individuals to solve this problem ?

#plastic #bags #bottles #envirnment #damage #environment #governments #individuals
Environment
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The environment
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 is a case that all of the
people
 on the planet should take care of it .
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Environment
Enviroment
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The enviroment
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 is the main reason for a better life for
animals
 and human
being
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beings
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.
enviroment
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environment
 is the
sheild
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shield
 that
protect
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protects
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 the earth from
ultra violet
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ultraviolet
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 radiation .
unfortantely
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Unfortunately
people
 are the main reasons for the
damages
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damage
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 that happen to the
environment
 and they have to take steps and decisions to care more about it .
environment
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the environment
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 is one of the main reasons for the good health of
people
 and the non
extint
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extinct
 of
animals
 , there are many factors that
causes
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damages
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damage
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of
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to
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 the
enviroment
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environment
 which is the
consuming
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consumption
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 of
the
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apply
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plastic
 , it is
find
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fine
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 in most
of
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people
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people's
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 houses , factories , roads , schools and
alot
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a lot
 of places , it is one of the main uses on the daily routine of human life , it is used in many things like using in
plastic
 bags , in some of the
manufactring
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manufacturing
 machines . after
people
 finish using
of
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plastic
 bottles they throw
it
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them
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in
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on
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 roads and most
of
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factories
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the factories
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 throw their
plastics
 packaging and
rabbish
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rubbish
in
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into
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 river or seas which cause the death
to
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the aquatic
animals
 and
some times
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sometimes
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 it leads to their
extint
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extent
extinct
, even if they burn
it
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apply
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this
 cause
an
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enomorous
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enormous
 damage
in
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 the atmosphere of the earth .
this
 leads to
avery
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a very
series
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serious
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case
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cases
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 that
threat
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threaten
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 our planet so some
government
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governments
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 made
awarness
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awareness
campagin
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campaign
 for the
plastic
damages
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damage
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 and to stop
use
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using
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 it and to have
another substitutions
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 like
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a change
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change
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changing
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 from
plastic
 bags and
start
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starting
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 to use bags that are
freindlly
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friendly
 to
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the enviroment
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enviroment
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environment
 and stop through it on
river
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the river
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 and
instead
 of it recycle it , individuals should
replaces
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 the
plastic
 that they had in their houses to a
freindly
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friendly
environment
stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
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 and
also
 to make
campagins
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campaigns
 to divine in the ocean to clean it from the
plastics
 to stop the death of the
animals
 .
plastics
is
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are
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 a huge threat
for
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 our
environment
 that should be stopped before many life of
animals
 leads it to death because of using
plastics
 so much , the
awarness
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awareness
 is much needed for our world to
knows
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know
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 that it damage and we can replace it in so many different ways that will help to protect our
environment
 and
atmoshpere
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atmosphere
.
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