Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in Zoos. However, others believe that there are good reasons to have Zoos in the 21st century. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Unquestionably, every coin has two sides and so are the
people
. society's
people
are divided into two groups and
therefore
keeping wild animals in
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become
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a topic
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of debate among
people
.
This
essay will compare and contrast both of the views
along with
my view which is in the favour of former view will be discussed in a sensible conclusion. On the one side,
few
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masses believe that we should not restrict animals in Zoos.
Firstly
, their lifestyle mainly depends on the forest and nature, so if we keep them in a fenced area, they cannot roam around freely.
Secondly
, their food habits are based on the surrounding resources, but in
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we can not feed them properly.
As a consequence
, they get sick
and
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which
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leads to death.
For instance
,
survey
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conducted in Hong Kong reveals that keeping
wild
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a wild
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animal
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animals
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in Zoos is one of the main reasons for
decline
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the decline
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in
its
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population. On the contrasting side,
people
who held another viewpoint say that forest land reducing because of urbanization so we should protect them by keeping them in
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. They believe that
,
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keeping them in one place is the only option to protect
from
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them from
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hunting.
Furthermore
, the governments should consider expanding
zoo
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the zoo
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area
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, so that they can have more space to live.
To conclude
, I would like to say that we should not keep wild animals in
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,
Instead
agencies should take necessary measures to save them for future generations.
However
, it will depend upon the mindsets of
people
which view they are in favour of.
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