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Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in Zoos. However, others believe that there are good reasons to have Zoos in the 21st century.

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Unquestionably, every coin has two sides and so are the
people
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. society's
people
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 are divided into two groups and
therefore
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 keeping wild
animals
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 in
zoos
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 becomes a topic of debate among the
people
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.
This
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 essay will compare and contrast both of the views
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 my view which is in the favour of former view will be discussed in a sensible conclusion. On the one side, a few masses believe that we should not restrict
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 in
Zoos
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.
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, their lifestyle mainly depends on the forest and nature, so if we keep them in a fenced area, they cannot roam around freely.
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, their food habits are based on the surrounding resources, but in ,zoo we can not feed them properly.
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, they get sick which leads to death.
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, a survey conducted in Hong Kong reveals that keeping wild
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 in
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 is one of the main reasons for the decline in their population. On the contrasting side,
people
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 who held another viewpoint say that forest land reducing because of urbanization so we should protect them by keeping them in
zoos
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. They believe that keeping them in one place is the only option to protect them from hunting.
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, the governments should consider expanding the zoo areas, so that they can have more space to live.
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, I would like to say that we should not keep wild
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 in
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,
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 agencies should take necessary measures to save them for future generations.
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, it will depend upon the mindsets of
people
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 which view they are in favour of.
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