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today fewer elderly people live with their children than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development

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In the World,everyone gets older at a particular
age
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.Recently , Some people have stayed with their
children
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 after retirement and some are not. In both points of view,it has some merits and demerits. In the Essay,we will discuss it. the
children
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 are most responsible for their old
age
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parents
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.Nowadays a number of Nursing care are available to take care of them.
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, It's depending on their budget.
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Rich people are affordable for sending their
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 to old
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 homes.But the poor can not do it . Most of the elders like to play with their grandson or granddaughter.
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 , they are often like homemade foods. they can feel a lot of comfort in the house with their
children
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. These are the some positive when
parents
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 stay with us.
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, In modern cities, everybody rushing for their daily routine life works or business.If their
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 are staying with them , someone must stay with their
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 in the house.
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 is a problem for youngers.the senior citizen's medical expenses are
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 not cheaper than usual. wealthy people have their own nurses or doctors to take their
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.an Unwealthy community surely can not do it like
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. In conclusion , The golden peoples are most available for their
children
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 and countries. The Government should take care of them and
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 bring a lot of life insurance plans for them and it will help them in old
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 time. In my point of view,
parents
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 staying with their
children
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 have been getting huge benefits compared to others.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Demographic trends
  • Family planning
  • Societal norms
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Economic implications
  • Work-life balance
  • Overpopulation
  • Cultural perceptions
  • Personal autonomy
  • Life satisfaction
  • Elderly care
  • Labor force
  • Population dynamics
  • Child-free lifestyle
  • Resource allocation
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