It is better for college students to live on campus than live at home with their parents. To what extent do you agree with this idea?

Here we can take a teenager into consideration, and discuss life at the college hotel,living with peers or staying with parents as they are used to it, here listed down some possible ways. It depends on the person ,how they will accept and like to live, few people think about ,having personal space, are not interested to share with peers , and lack adjustment.
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- if they won't stay in the campus inn ,they have to adjust with roommates, may need to share kitchen and bathroom and
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a study room. there are some disadvantages too, they have to travel from home to college, exposing
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pollution,lot of time-consuming for transport. many like to stay at the hostel because so many advantages are there,staying safe and secure, having group studies, knowledge sharing, and helping each other during project work. time-saving,
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they have homesick, but later ,on they adjust to the lifestyle,
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class they have to submit assignments ,so they help each other to complete the work on time. there are some disadvantages to staying at home, exposing the pollution, striking in the traffic,lot of time consumption for travelling,but they feel safe and comfortable at home staying with their parents,but
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students should choose to live in the college hostel ,so that they can learn anything like adjusting with each other,analysing the behaviour of the other.
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