Nowadays many people choose choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

The phenomenon of many
people
preferring to create their own business rather than work for others as an employee has aroused wide concern among wide circles.
This
article will discuss
about
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why more and more
people
tend to open their
company
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and what are the disadvantages of doing
this
. Of all the reasons why
people
would like to create
new
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company, probably the most significant one is that creating a new business is easier than
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past. To illustrate, the cost of
opeing
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opening
operating
a shop is lower than
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past because of the internet.
People
can sell their goods by only
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an account on some websites or apps
such
as Amazon and Taobao.
People
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not
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longer need to concern about
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customer service and shipping since the website and app will take care of them. Despite the aforementioned reasons, there are some drawbacks that should not be overlooked, and probably the most serious one is that the income is not stable, and the worst case is that you may even earn your cost back.
For example
, you open a meat store and the quality of
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is good.
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health
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diet
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to popular
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the
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young age, which is a diet concept that
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people
should not eat too
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meats
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, and
this
make a
finanical
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financial
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your store because there is
less customer
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want
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to eat meat. There are many unexpected problems that may affect your business in good or bad.
However
,
this
may not be a problem for you if you work for others. Under
this
line of thinking, it seems to me that technology can help us simplify the daily management of organisations or companies, but we should not underrate the risk and responsibility of being self-employed.
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  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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