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The two maps demonstrate the illustrations of university sports courts in the years of 1990 and 2023 respectively.

The two maps demonstrate the illustrations of university sports courts in the years of 1990 and 2023 respectively.
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Looking from an
overall
 perspective, it is readily apparent that
the
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major changes had been made to all over the sports
court
:
indoor
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the indoor
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pool
 had replaced
outdoor
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the outdoor
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 one, changing room had been lengthened and
park
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the park
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, as well as car park,
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as well as
car
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the car
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park
 had been removed in order to place basketball tennis
court
. In 1990, there
had
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existed a
park
 with grassland and trees which was replaced with
basketball
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a basketball
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court
 as
car
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the car
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park
 had been replaced with
tennis
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a tennis
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court
 by now.
Indoor
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The indoor
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pool
 had been relocated to
place
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a place
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 of
outdoor
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an outdoor
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pool
,
whereas
 the length of changing room had been increased moving slightly to the right side above
a
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 fitness centre, which both were
the
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replacements
of
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 tennis courts from 1990. The only two places that had been unchanged are
café
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the café
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 and reception. The border had been built limiting
indoor
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the indoor
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pool
, changing room, fitness centre and unchanged goods.
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