In many countries, governments spend large sums of money on the arts and this is supported by some taxpayers as worthwhile. Others, however, think that this money would be better spent on health and education. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Art
is considered an important part of society, and it portrays
culture
beautifully.
Therefore
, some countries spend a lot of their money on
art
. Some taxpayers support
this
.
However
, some people argue that
this
income should be spent more on
health
or
education
. I will discuss both views in
this
essay, and give my opinion. These days,
art
is becoming more popular and considered a crucial part of one's nation. Many kinds of
art
forms could be the advantages of one region that can be promoted for tourism.
for example
, the traditional dances of Balinese or Sundanese attract thousands of visitors every year.
Hence
, The Governments in many nations spend a higher proportion of their revenue on
art
. So that they can improve the tourism sector. Other reasons may include preserving the
culture
.
On the other hand
, the opponents argue that there are many sectors that should be given more attention and money
such
as
education
and
health
. it is a matter of fact that many children in many countries do not get the
education
they deserved as their parents can not afford it. It is
also
a prevalent problem in many nations
such
as Indonesia that many people can not afford the advanced
health
care they need without subsidies from the Government.
While
it is true that
art
is an important aspect of our
culture
and should be financed, I believe that for a country
such
as Indonesia, Money should be prioritized on youngsters'
education
and public
health
. When we have more income
then
it may be spent on preserving our
culture
including the arts.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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Example:

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