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It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (eg.dinosour,dodo,..). There are no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 era of globalisation, some people argue it is
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a natural
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 process for certain
animals
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 species
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 as dodo or
dinosour
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dinosaur
dinosaurs
 to become extinct and there is no reason why
community
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 should try to prevent
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 from
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. From my personal point of view, I strongly agree with the statement aforementioned above.
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 lead to a logical conclusion. Supporting my agreement
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this phenomena
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 is natural. As To cite an example, in New Zealand, the bird species called Kereru
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able to swallow seeds of native
threes
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trees
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 and disperse them had extinct. The extinction of
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 may result in
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 of many native trees
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large scale
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 fire and extreme changes in climate.
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,
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 small population of birds could be vulnerable to extinction. Explaining some
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 point in favour
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 the statement is
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 human activities give impact
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this
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 situation. Since human is one of the most brilliant living creatures on earth, they contribute to massive destruction.
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, when the human population
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 year by year, they began to
built
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 their own territory by constructing
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a building
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building
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, exploitation of natural resources and more which creates pollution and loss of habitats.
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 the number of endangered flora and fauna. To summarise, it is undeniable that human life has been maintained by a natural world. It is predicted that the extinction will come back to be a natural event and not be in relation to human activities.
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