The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 

You should write at least 150 words.
The assigned bar graph expounds
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information about how the results of a survey conducted over three year period to discover what people who live in
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London think of the city. The data is calibrated in
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percentage. It seems that those citizens
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lived in
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London, which noticed that
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of shopping had the highest proportion in
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three years, about
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41% to 45%. In the contrast, the lowest proportion was recorded in
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area
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around
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20% to 25% in
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, second and third years. Along
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, the job opportunities and the mixture of people
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seemed equal percentile in between 35% and 37%. Probing
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, the ratio of
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and art gallery
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stood at 21% in the beginning year but the fraction was slightly rise
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3% in 2 and 3 years and ends its peaked value of 27%. Afterwards,
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,
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had
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ratio as compared to
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system into 20% to 25%.
Overall
, it is clear from the above graph that the results of a survey showed that shopping, job opportunities and
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of people that things, which are loved by every person
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London.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 72%.
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