The issue of gay marriage remains controversial. Some people think that this trend has adverse effects on the society while others believe that it is seen as a natural trend and right for people to choose this type of marriage. Should gay marriage be legal?

Gay
marriages
are becoming a very relevant topic of discussion because of the mixed opinions surrounding
it
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. Some
people
firmly believe that they are bad for society,
whereas
others preach that
people
should be free to choose the person they want to be with for the rest of their life, regardless of gender. I endorse freedom of choice and following your heart and for those
reasons
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I support the idea of gay
marriages
being legal and
widly accepeted
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widely accepted
. In today's world
people
are thought to treat everyone equally, to accept other
people
's desires and
opinion
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and not
to
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judge them based on that. Morals that did not exist in
that
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past. Happiness should not be judged or illegal. When a person is happy he will want to give back and help others by,
for example
, volunteering and solving public issues and participating in charity organisations.
Furthermore
, the acceptance of gay
marriages
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has other great effects.
For example
, gay
people
biologially
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biologically
cannot have offspring.
This
has two main benefits .
Firstly
,
world
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population is growing at an alarming rate and gay
marriages
help lower that rate of birth because of their biological nature.
Secondly
, if a gay couple decides that they want to have a child, they can
addopt
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adopt
one.
That is
great because nowadays orphanages are a
shellter
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shelter
for many kids who do not have a family. In
conlusion
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conclusion
, the acceptance of gay
marriages
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is
improtant
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important
both morally,
to allow
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individuals to embrace their true nature and desires and not oppress them, and politically because it can potentially help solve an issue
that is
possing
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a great threat to the world we live in.
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