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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some
people
 believe that living in a non-native country could cause serious social
problem
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such
 as practical
problems
.
This
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 essay I will discuss the disadvantages of living in a foreign country. On the one hand,
foreign
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 language is a barrier
of
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communication
. Individuals can be facing difficulties in communicating with local citizens when they can not speak fluently enough in a foreign language.
Also
, non-local individuals can not know the common wording in
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society. It could produce
misunderstanding
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misunderstandings
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 during
the
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communication
.
For example
, when an American visits a local market in Korea where there is a large number of local
people
 unable to speak
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. They can not understand each other. It leads to miscommunications.
Thus
, it is unable to provide
a
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quality
of
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communication
 between each other.
On the other hand
,
people
 who live overseas could easily edge out. Individuals would not be able to make new friends smoothly. They can not share their daily life and seek
for
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help from others. It affects their emotions
such
 as loneliness and nobody could understand their situation. When they face a problem, they can not ask for help from others.
For instance
, Mary felt alone since she immigrated to India. She had no friends
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 relatives there. She could not find her previous friends immediately if she faced difficulties
due to
 the time difference.
Therefore
,
people
 who live overseas get lonely easily. In conclusion, living in an unfamiliar society causes a lot of
problems
such
 as
communication
problems
 and emotional
problems
.
Therefore
 I agree with the statement.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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