Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe boys and girls benefits more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in single-sex schools. Others,
however
, believe boys and girls
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more from attending mixed schools. Each education system
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advantages and disadvantages. In
this
essay, I will discuss both.
Firstly
, most
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parents
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hope to their children will have good academic
achievement
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.
Therefore
, they believe that these institutions can help their children concentrate on their studies.
Moreover
, female students may be safer in
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school
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. They are not teased or harassed. But one of the disadvantages, they can’t understand the
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between the sexes and how to maintain
friendship
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between the opposite sex.
On the other hand
, there
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quite
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reason
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to send a child to
co-educational
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school
. They are aware of gender differences. They are lived in
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equal gender
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environment.
In addition
, they
also
learn how to cooperate and manipulate the advantages of different gender in common work. In conclusion, the choice of which
school
depends on each person's opinion. In my opinion, I think that both boys and girls should be educated in one
school
. They can learn from each other.
Besides
, they could know the ways how to behave and
also
respect their relationships.
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