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Fossil fuel is the main source of energy. In some countries the use of alternative source of energy is encouraged . To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement . It is a positive or negative development .

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Nowadays, the main economic and vital need of all countries is the extraction or purchase of fossil
fuels
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. In recent decades, these
energy
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 resources have been recognized as the main ones for
energy
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 production, but there is a lot of debate about the
use
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 of alternative
fuels
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. I believe that humanity has been offered enough alternatives to shift the focus away from fossil
fuels
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.
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, it is known that the
use
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 of fossil
fuels
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 often harms the green agenda. Recently, many countries have been paying great attention to
climate
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 issues, as the fact of global warming and
climate
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 change has been proven. Fossil
fuels
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,
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 as oil, often pollute the environment with harmful substances.
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, sometimes oil products even end up in the ocean, which poisons a thousand creatures and leads to disastrous consequences. So, for
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 consumption, there are wind farms that do not harm the environment at all, but bring the same amount of
energy
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.
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, harmful fumes from the
use
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 of gas and gasoline for cars heavily
pollute
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 cities and in the long term lead to a greenhouse effect.
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, most megacities face high rates of environmental pollution, which harms not only the
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 but
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 the residents of cities. Meanwhile, there are hydrogen-fueled cars or electric cars, which,
although
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 more difficult to maintain, do not harm others.
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, humanity has many opportunities to
use
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 alternative fuel options. Sometimes it is more expensive, but the
climate
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 issue is more important for a human in the long run. I believe that if all people unite to create more environmentally friendly surroundings, it will be better not only for people but
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 for our planet, which we must protect.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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