You recently ordered a small item online but when it arrived it was unusable. Write a letter to the company that sold you the item: give details about the order you made explain what was wrong with the item tell the company what you want them to do about it

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Dear sir, I am writing

this

letter in regard to my recent purchase from a website called farfetched. As my younger brother is a big sneakerhead, I bought him a new pair of one from the website. To commence with , I saw a newly launched collection of your sneakers which really had a tremendous design. I ended up buying a bunky drip high ankle variant for him. Despite, what I saw on the webpage it had minor differences in colour tone.

Additionally

, because of the poor packaging it had creases all over it only on the left shoe.

Moreover

, as his birthday was nearby I still had not informed him about it,

thus

it would be awful because he was eagerly waiting for

this

pair.

Apart from

this

, I hope you can arrange an exchange of

this

product as soon as possible

elsewhere

a full refund of my purchase. Hope to hear from you soon. Yours sincerely, Vandan Patel.

Submitted by Vandanpatel0709 on Thu Mar 23 2023

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

160 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

order number
shipment
delivery
damaged
defective
package
request
replacement
refund
customer support
awaiting your prompt response
solution
photos attached
upon inspection
apologies in advance

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You recently ordered a small item online but when it arrived it was unusable. Write a letter to the company that sold you the item: give details about the order you made explain what was wrong with the item tell the company what you want them to do about it

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people feel that we should protect all wild animals. Other people think that only some wild animals should be protected. Discuss both points of view and give your opinon.

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be abel to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

some people work for the same organisation all their working life. others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.