You recently ordered a small item online but when it arrived it was unusable. Write a letter to the company that sold you the item: give details about the order you made explain what was wrong with the item tell the company what you want them to do about it

Dear sir, I am writing

this

letter in regard to my recent purchase from a website called farfetched. As my younger brother is a big sneakerhead, I bought him a new pair of one from the website. To commence with , I saw a newly launched collection of your sneakers which really had a tremendous design. I ended up buying a bunky drip high ankle variant for him. Despite, what I saw on the webpage it had minor differences in colour tone.

Additionally

, because of the poor packaging it had creases all over it only on the left shoe.

Moreover

, as his birthday was nearby I still had not informed him about it,

thus

it would be awful because he was eagerly waiting for

this

pair.

Apart from

this

, I hope you can arrange an exchange of

this

product as soon as possible

elsewhere

a full refund of my purchase. Hope to hear from you soon. Yours sincerely, Vandan Patel.

Submitted by Vandanpatel0709 on Thu Mar 23 2023

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

160 words

7.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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You recently ordered a small item online but when it arrived it was unusable. Write a letter to the company that sold you the item: give details about the order you made explain what was wrong with the item tell the company what you want them to do about it

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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