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In the future, nobody wiil buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying.

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In recent years, the majority of folks are not likely to purchase
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original
newspaper
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newspapers
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 or hardcover books
due to
 the fact that they will have access to read everything on the internet without any problem and payments. I wholeheartedly disagree with
this
 statement because the press
as well as
 magazines will always be crucial for society. Analysing the statement and explaining
further
, the first and foremost reason behind
this
 is that reading books from year to year is becoming more trendy. What is more, in cosmopolitan people organise a
book
 festival connected with their favourite publication.
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 a lot of avid readers come there to meet their favourite author and spend
some
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 good time with other fanatics.
Besides
 that, I personally was dumbfounded
how
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 many readers were there. Probing ahead,
one
 of the main underlying reasons is that, the majority of folks have their own priceless collection apropos their most-like edition of the
book
.
Moreover
, for
them
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 it is something special and much more riveting to read a hardcover
book
 rather than an e-
book
. Moving
further
, for some folks the option of having their e-
book
 on
one
 device is much more convenient and eco-friendly.
Besides
 that, to produce
one
book
 workers have to cut
one
 tree. In conclusion, people are divided
in
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 their options. Some people prefer to read e-books because they do not have to pay any cent.
However
, there are some hard readers that are more likely to spend money to read their erased
book
 in
hardcover
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 edition.
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