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In many countries, good schools and medical facilities are available only in cities. Some people think new teachers and doctors should work in rural areas for a few years, but others think everyone should be free to choose where they work. Discuss and give your own opinion.

#countries #schools #facilities #cities #people #teachers #doctors #work #areas #years
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rate
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 it has become inevitable to be living a luxurious life in rural
areas
. People mostly live there because they are either not fond of
the
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city life or are unable to sustain themselves in the cities. But that certainly does not mean they should be deprived of basic facilities
such
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good
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educationan
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educational
education
 system and healthcare.  Everyone is free to take their cautious decisions and one can not be forced but some work can be done on incentives which
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 the investors invest and teachers and doctors come there and provide facilities. It has been observed that the land in rural
areas
 is always cheaper than
urban
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areas
. If schools and hospitals are built and
government
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 is
also
 providing them with subsidies, in my
opinion
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 it should work out. It is impossible for someone to travel from rural to urban if at any point any emergency takes arises. People in rural
areas
 certainly cannot afford to commute on daily basis for basic facilities. These days parents in rural
areas
 are meeting their
day to day
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 ends and saving money just to send their children
for
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 better education
to
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 the city. New business plans can be proposed which may be beneficial for all the parties.
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