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Some people feel that cities should allow for spaces for graffiti while others feel it should be banned. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

#people #cities #spaces #graffiti
It is believed
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some people that spaces for wall
arts
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 ought to be permitted in cities
while
 others assert these kinds of actions should be inhibited. Graffiti may be beneficial for cities’
landscape
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landscapes
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 to attract some tourists and many
artists
’
exhibition
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. Looking at
this
 case from the other side, it may be reasonable to prevent these actions because
variety
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 of
artists
 may present unrelated works and
this
 leads to
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 cities’
pattern
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.
One
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 the one hand, allowing some areas to graffiti
artists
 may bring positive impacts to cities. They can demonstrate their works
in particular
 regions
such
 as ruined or abandoned towns and they contribute to these places may be appealing again
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 citizens.
For example
, some old facilities
such
 as old factory yards may be devoted
them
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to
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 their talents.
Moreover
, some competitions can be held in order to revive
this
 region and tourists can be attracted.
Therefore
, either city dwellers and
artists
 can obtain some profits
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 these applications and events.
One
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 the other hand, banning these kinds of actions may be logical in terms of
visual
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aspect
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.
Although
 many graffiti
artists
 show good works, a space or a region
which
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 they gather to reflect their different artistic
talent
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 may be impacted negatively because of unrelated drawing
an
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 depictions can be happened.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban art
  • vandalism
  • vibrancy
  • aesthetic
  • decline
  • creative expression
  • cultural asset
  • legal ramifications
  • marginalized groups
  • community engagement
  • ethical considerations
  • gentrification
  • zoning regulations
  • public space
  • civic responsibility
  • curated walls
  • street artists
  • social commentary
  • property rights
  • anti-graffiti coatings
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